Six!

Based on what Josh and Will suggested in class, I basically need to shorten my essay a bit and work on focusing on getting a point across. In relation to the readings we have done so far, I agree with them. Most of the examples we have read so far had clear purposes. Or, if they didn't, the purpose became clear by the end of the story. Since my story isn't finished, I haven't had the opportunity to work that out. I know why I am writing this and what I want to do with it, but I haven't edited at all and therefore I'm missing parts of the story that would help to clarify my purpose, as well as a solid conclusion that would help the reader understand fully. I need to do a little bit of freewriting and incorporate a few more "episodes" into the piece. Josh also suggested that some of the parts where I'm describing the seizure are repetitive. In a way, I kind of want them to be, but at the same time I don't want that to be boring for the reader. I should probably work those out a little bit, too.

I also have a tendency to switch verb tenses throughout the story, which I need to fix when I edit what I've written so far. It will make it easier for the reader to follow if the verb tense stays consistent, so I need to change the non-italicized parts to present tense, and the italicized parts to past tense. I think I should also have a stronger introduction, which will draw the reader in and perhaps explain a little bit more from the start. I don't want to give everything away (as it seems most of the CNF we have read use this tactic to create interest,) but I don't want to be too vague, either.